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Hello all!
I'm starting to write fanfic and I need some help.  I'm writing mostly in the BSG fandom so anyone familiar with it who can take a look at my stories (I have two so far) and give feedback would be wonderful.  I need help specifically with cannon details mostly, but general editing for flow, style, and grammar would also be great.  Posted below is my first one.  I'll post the other one separately.  Below a cut for cleanliness.

Title: Slightly More than Worthy
Fandom: Battlestar Galactica (2003)
Characters: Dee, OC - mention of Lee/Dee
Rating: PG, but nothing really terrible
Spoilers: through S3 for safety
Disclaimer(s): Not mine.  I'd be insanely rich otherwise.  Since I'm not, its probably a pretty good indication.  No infringement meant.  Just writing for fun.  Please - don't sue me.  My dog wouldn't like going to jail with me. 

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Hey, I need a beta for a one-shot that I've written, thanks in advance to those interested. It is a fandom fic, but I'm not really looking for someone to analyze their relationship, just my own grammar and style so even if you aren't into the fandom, feel free to criticize

Title: -farewell-
Fandom: Football [Soccer]
Pairings (if applicable): Sergio Ramos/Fernando Torres
Rating: PG
Warnings: Slash
Look for: Grammar, style... really any problems you may see. Sometimes things are so perfect in my mind, but I have trouble getting it down on paper, so please help find ways to create a better effect on the reader. I often jump tenses, so please look for that!
Disclaimer: I don't own these two and one has a beautiful girlfriends so I doubt they are gay =]

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Similar Triangles

Rurouni Kenshin

I know no one here reads Rurouni Kenshin fanfiction, but this was originally an original fiction but I changed it partway into it because its hard to find people to read and give feedback on original fiction. I wish I had kept it original now. The point is, I changed the characterization a little from original characters, but not much. So its extremely out of character.

This isn't the entire thing, just the beginning.

: Misao and the Hex
Fandom: Rurouni Kenshin
Rating : PG
Pairings : None so far
Summary : On a rainy day Kaoru meets a very tiny little girl in a garden
Disclaimer : I don't own Rurouni Kenshin or its characters
Word counts : 1490

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DW: 11/Amy

Original Fic Newbie Here!

Hello, I've just jotted down a possible introduction to an original fic I've been toying with for the last few days. Its the first time I've written anything for 3 years so be gentle!

Titles : Untitled so far
Fandom: Original Fic.
Rating : PG
Pairings : None so far.
Summary : Eve meets Peter, Hermione, Deirdre and Jonathan for the first time. And is rather soggy in the process.
Disclaimer : My characters!!
Word counts : 1590 

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Steven Gerrard
  • scruby

A Scrubs fic

I just need a quick beta. This story is pretty short someone already looked over it and betaed it, but because English is not my native language I try to get my fics betaed more then once.

Title: (Don't have one yet)

 Fandom: Scrubs
JD/Dr. Cox

Rating: PG-13

Disclaimer: Not mine.

Warnings: Slash.

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I need your help.

I finished writing short football fiction. But now, I have 2 big troubles in this story. One is "How to use Cell phone at foreign country" and another is the tense!

At foreign country, on cell phone, I don't know how to forbid a call from specific person. And I think the tense troubles me forever!! I need your help again now.

Titles : Cell phone
Fandom: footballslash
Rating : PG (POV)
Pairings : Per Mertesacker/Tim Borowski
Summary : On Tim's birthday, Per and Tim fall out with each other. The cause of a quarrel is 'Cell phone'.
Disclaimer : This story is POV (of Tim). And this is complete fiction. Not real.
Word counts : about 780

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DeadWar: Out of Sight

Fandom: Buffyverse

Rating: PG

Setting: Roughly 2 years post-"Chosen"; part of the DeadWar series

Characters: Ensemble

Disclaimer: This fiction is based on Buffy: the Vampire Slayer and Angel, which are the property of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy.  Original characters are mine; all others belong to Joss.

Beta Status: Currently searching; my regular beta is swamped due to finals.

Previous entries: This is the most recent entry in the DeadWar series.  Some elements may be confusing to those unfamiliar with the story so far.
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Slash X-files story

Fandom: X-files
Title: Something Worth Fighting For
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Slash
Disclaimer: All characters are owned by FOX entertainment
Summary: Mulder's life has always been his quest for the Truth. Now, he realizes that is not enough and that if he's going to fight the future, he must have a life worth fighting for.
Spoilers: Everything up through Essence and part of Existence. Starts with and goes AU with the deleted scene in Skinner's office.
Beta type: Anything, really. I'm open to any reasonable suggestion. Let me know if there is anything I need to add or clear up in the plot. Grammar editting and catching typos would be very helpful. Collapse )
BANDOM: Gabe/William kiss
  • merihn

Concrit needed.

Title: Goodbye kiss…
Fandom: Supernatural
Pairing: Sam/Dean
Word Count: 520
Summary: Sam is leaving for Stanford and the brothers have their own special goodbye.
Warnings: Slash, incest, angst
Notes: Written for mmom and my set of Kissing> fics.

Especially needed is grammar and sentence structure help. Thanks.

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So, gimme what you got. *grin*
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utaite - piko gaze

Hell has frozen over. I wrote fic.

This is a first for me. I've never really written fic before.
So, besides the occasional grammar or spelling mistake (or even barbarisms - I'm not a native), I have two things I'd like checked especially:
1) This was written in random bursts over 4 months, so there's some inconsistencies in style where I left off only to come back to weeks later.
2) The last bit is written from a different POV, but I kind of like it so I don't really want to change POVs. Does it work or is it too disconnected from the rest?

Oh, and I have an issue with run-on sentences and pace in general, so any suggestions there are welcome too.

Title: Five days in the life of Metze's couch
Author: penguin_attie
Fandom: footballslash
Pairing: Christoph Metzelder/OMC, Christoph Metzelder/Sebastian Kehl... sort of implied Sebastian Kehl/Metze's couch *cough*
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Uh, it's written from the POV of a couch. Just how real do you think it is?
Summary: Life as Christoph Metzelder's couch is pretty boring. Unless Sebastian Kehl happens to stop by.
Note: ...I can't believe I'm doing this.

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